Dark Star

a pretty touching poem. i really liked it. it had good flow and the transitioning was pretty good. the emotion was strong but the writing was light which got the ...

well its deffinatly deep. a little scetchy and rough in some places with the wording n stuff but pretty gud. ur display of emotion was very clearly displayed and i ...

A Devil Lurks Within A display of smooth emotion Defies those about. A fruit with outside perfection Rotten throughout. I called you friend And so did she. The sin you ...

From the Beginning..The Very Start I knew from the beginning, The very start… When all this was new. Unflawed and thriving. I knew from the start. It would come to ...

i really liked this was very touching. though some of the rhyming was a little off you still pulled together an awesome peice of writing. the word held to their ...

i like simple, short but intriguing from beginning to end. the rhyming scheme is pretty good and the feeling that u display is awesome...like totaly bittersweetness kindda. i love how ...

a very interesting poem. i really like the emotion that u displayed through ur use of words. u did an awesome job writing on such a 'subject". ur words flowed ...

i really like the ocncept of your poem. its unique and different. you did a really great job with the stucture and your wording. everything flowed pretty nicely and you ...

hmmm...very different. I LOVE IT!! its simple and short but just gives this awesome dark vibe. the imagery is really intense and it just sends a chill up your spine. ...

very interesting...i really liked it. even though it was an inconsistant pattern the words just seemed to work. sure the idea was a little conventional but you pulled to off. ...

this was a lot better and much stronger. there is still some punctuation missing that is important, without it some you you lines are like run ons. but other then ...

i really enjoyed this poem. it was very unique and different in every way. also very creative. you really caught my attention right to the end. the structure was very ...

you have a great way with words. you know how to make them flow and work together to create both strong and powerful imagery and emotion. it was very haunting ...

very intense! full of imagery and packed with emotion. a very interesting subject i might add. you have a very unique perspective on such unusual topics. you really were able ...

very interesting. i really enjoyed your poem. it was very discriptive and full of imagery. a deffinatly agree with kris..you have a way with words. you know how to use ...